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Asami Sato ([personal profile] stickshift) wrote in [community profile] tushanshu2012-09-24 08:46 am

[video]

So, who all here is into racing?

[simple, direct, to the point. she's smiling as she says it, though. It's about equal parts mischievous and competitive.]

Oh! And for anyone working on or interested in Mr. Kent's newspaper, I'm going to be writing a section on automotives. If anyone has any information on any of the vehicles or mechanics here, I'd love to talk shop. Thanks.

[She gives the camera a little wave, and disconnects.]
ancillary: (Ricochet)

action; /taps the fourth wall then carries on

[personal profile] ancillary 2012-10-01 11:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Fiscal summaries for my interim employer here. Not much for number crunching, that man.

[ With eyes that stuck out against her dark hair, Miranda distantly registered why she had almost called her Oriana when they met. Of course, Asami was a sharp beauty in here own right. ]

Would you like to wait for coffee first, or get down to business?
ancillary: (I just wanna change)

action;

[personal profile] ancillary 2012-10-06 11:47 am (UTC)(link)
You were right to be concerned that you were too technical in the draft.

[ Miranda put it so bluntly as only she could. While really as much an editor as she was an enthusiast for this sort of thing, she knew tech and how to explain to those that didn't. Asami struck her then as someone that had more experience bouncing off those that knew their stuff, and liable to her lost in their own jargon. She could sympathize with her there.

Document in hand, Miranda stoke a red pen across it every now and again between pulls of her luke warm coffee.
]

But you've found a happy medium, and I think it would reach most reference levels in your readership. You know what you're talking about no question there. My only suggestion is that you branch out a little, and maybe try to trim it down to a single topic in each article. Give yourself more room to go into greater detail.

This would work as an introductory piece, though.
ancillary: (grand from a distance)

action; sure is late in here

[personal profile] ancillary 2012-11-03 03:32 am (UTC)(link)
I know that look.

[ Miranda actually smiled; albeit in her usual, reserved sort of way. She flipped through the small stack Asami handed her once more then slide it back down to Asami's side of the table. ]

The last thing they teach us better bred sort is how to take criticism. It's alright.